This is actually the week 6 format but for some reason it didn't post so I'm posting it for my week 6. I enjoyed the parameters I just hope I nailed them all. I used an alternating syllabic pattern of 8-9-8-9.
Crabapple Trees my Dad Planted
Spiderwebs collect and reflect the
morning dew. I am sure they would
shimmer if it wasn't overcast.
Continue through the woods. I shake
with the leaves, with wind, with the birds.
My natural polyrhythm.
My shoes soak up the puddles wrung out
from the greys and the whites above
I knew I should have worn socks today.
Doesn't matter, I'm almost there.
Three crabapple trees my dad planted
petitioning the sky's color.
Grasses converging into carpet --
Fabric samples try to mimic
these textures, this apparatus.
My Sherwin Williams, my Blooming--
Look! The Cherokee Rose is Blooming!
Grandma says it's our state flower.
Friends call me the modern day Huck Finn.
Usually, I think they are right.
The sun blasts through the quilt of greys and whites,
this afternoon, I'll nap outside.
The pattern I got was 9 8 9 8 8 8 9 8 9 8 9 8 9 8 8 8 8 9 9 10 8 ... but maybe I read it wrong because I only went through once counting because keeping up is hard for me lol. This is definitely a cool outdoors man perspective. I like the way you wrote to compare nature to things in a home like carpet and a quilt and made nature the narrators home. But if I read the pattern right that means you need to go back and check to fix that? so that is my improvement advice! Really cool piece and sounds like a fun exercise I might need to try.
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